Email i sent to photographers

i basically one day just wanted to get the yellow pages out, find some local photographers in Leeds and just email them. I sent this with my flickr address and a small selection of low res images just in case they didn't have time out look at my website.

Hi

I am a second year student of Photography at Leeds College of Art and Design. My main interests are in commercial photography this involves, portraits, food, products and fashion portraits. Over the past few years I have become a more confident and more experience photographer. I challenge myself as much as possible, to learn new tips and traits to become a better at what I want to do.

As a student I am trying to expand my skills in most photographic areas however I feel that studio photography is the field I am going to commit to a career in.
Are there work experience/ job placements/ jobs available/general learning in your company, to further more level of knowledge in studio photography?

Looking at your website i can see that would gain a lot from an experience in your studio and I would be very excited to be apart of your studio environment.